我想写信给范德萨,我现在内容已经有一个初稿了,请各位英语高手帮我看下这段文字有没有语病,thankyou!

我想写信给范德萨,我现在内容已经有一个初稿了,请各位英语高手帮我看下这段文字有没有语病,thankyou!
Dear Mr.Van Der Sar,
I'm a loyal fan to you and Manchester United in China named Liu Yuhui.Congratulation to you braking the record of England goalkeeper.
In Manchester United,you are the center of the team.you helped your team get out of the hell in the Premier League and the UEFA Champions League.Although your team were not the champion in the end of Premier League last season,you deserve all the rewards,you’re still the best.
In The FA Community Shield 2010,you helped Manchester United become the champion.In the match between Manchester United and Chelsea,your great performance in the match helped your team win the game.
There’re many MU fans in China loving you very much.They wish you could pay a visit to China,see the wonderful World Expo and Great Wall in Shanghai and Beijing.We are really eager for your coming,and we all welcome you!
In the end,hope you can get more for Manchester United and yourself in the new season.You are a legend!
最后一句要用“You are a legend"还是“You are the legend"呢,
I'm a loyal Chinese fan to you and Manchester United who named Yuhui Liu需不需要“who”,to see the wonderful World Expo and Great Wall in Shanghai and Beijing.需要“to”吗?Finally,hope you can get more for Manchester United and yourself in the new season,要用get还是用goal ,加一段Mr.Van der Sar,can you realize a wish for me?I love to Manchester United and you.I always want to have your signature.Thank you very much.好不好