雅思小作文,能得几分啊This bar chart illustrates the time (inbillions m

雅思小作文,能得几分啊
This bar chart illustrates the time (inbillions minutes) of the UK telephone calls in relation to three categories,form 1995-2002.
First of all,seeing from the chart,we canget the information that local-fixed line is the most popular of all,thespending time of it is approximately 72 billion in 1995,which is twice ofnational and international-fixed line.After a slight increase,the number oftime of local-fixed line reaches a peak,with nearly 90 billion in 1999,andthen it decreases to about 70 billions in 2002.
In addition,the using time of national andinternational-fixed line grows steadily during 1995 to 2002,from around 37billion to more than 60 billion,which is the second most popularcommunicational method.
Furthermore,mobiles are the least popularbecause the spending time is just 3 million in 1995,however,a dramatic increaseof it is from 1999 to 2002,which grows up to approximately 50billion.
To sum up,the tendency of usinglocal-fixed line is to fall down,which still has the most popular situation,but as the smallest number of using time,mobiles are developed bloomingly.
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