英语改错!好的话给200!传说N年以前,天上有10个太阳,天气异常炎热,有一个叫后羿的人用弓射下了9个太阳,从此世界恢复

英语改错!好的话给200!
传说N年以前,天上有10个太阳,天气异常炎热,有一个叫后羿的人用弓射下了9个太阳,从此世界恢复了平静.因为后羿出色的表现王母娘娘送个他一颗长生不老药~这是最早没有记载的传说
关于长生不老药最早有记载的传说在中国中有记载,大约在公元213年秦始皇统一了6国大兴修建宫殿~之后开始寻找长不老药,有一个叫徐福的人那时叫"方士"早期的化学家替他出海寻找,但一去不复反再也没有回来.
我认为随着科学技术的飞速发展,将会有许许多多新鲜的事物出现在我们的视野里,改变了我们的生活.我想会有薄如纸片的大屏幕高清晰电视,有会说话的电饭锅,有纽扣大小的手机,有会变颜色能调温的鞋子等东西~那长生不老药也就离我们不远了~
Legend N years ago,heaven has 10 SUNS,hot weather is abnormal,one of his people with bows down nine sun,the restored calm.Because of his excellent performance of the heavenly queen send him an elixir this is the earliest record of no legend
About elixir of the earliest recorded in Chinese 《legend》 in historical records,in about A.D.there in qin shihuang unified 213 six nations built palaces - to raise for long old medicine,there is a call XuFu people then called "the alchemist" early chemist for him to find out,but never came back again.
I think with the rapid development of science and technology,there will be many new things in our field of vision,changed our life.I want to have a piece of paper,the big screen high-definition television is the electric cooker,speak,the size of the mobile phone button will change color can tempering shoes,etc - the elixir is not far away from us
Fable N year ago,the space has 10 sun,the weather is exceptionally burning hot,some were called Hou Yi the person to shoot 9 sun with the bow,henceforth the world restored tranquilly.Because Hou Yi's outstanding performance grandmother empress delivers his immortality medicine this does not have record fable to have the record fable most early about the immortality medicine to have the record most early in China,probably unified after A.D.213 year Chin Shihhuang 6 countries constructed palace energetically started to seek for the long not old medicine,some were called Xu Fu the person to be called " the alchemist " the early chemist to go to sea at that time for him seeks,as soon as but went not to repeat has not come back again.I thought that along with science's and technology's swift development,will have many fresh things to appear in ours field of vision,changed our life.I want to be able to have the thin like slip of paper large screen high clear television,has electric rice-cooker which will speak,will have the button size handset,will have will change thing that immortality medicines and so on shoe which the color can adjust temperature also leaves us not to be far 这是机器翻译的也可以该这个!
如有什么不足请多多指教~也可以对我的作文完全改进~