求批改英语作文.How is going?Our teacher read your exceptionally wel

求批改英语作文.
How is going?Our teacher read your exceptionally well-written essay yesterday.When it's over,I know I was impressed by your exceptionally well-written essay.I feel it very beautiful.I believe that everyone can feel it.
What's more I have learned lots of things form Mr.Fleagle's comments on his essay since it over .It can be seen as follow.On the one hand,no pains,no gains.Mr.Fleagle have recognized your efforts.I also work-harding in the next time.I believe that I can do it!Efforts make success!On the other hand,I learned something about how to get on well with my friends.We should learn to share with others.
I'm looking forward to your letter as soon as possible

点建议也行啊
语法错误 来点新颖句子也行
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老实吃亏 幼苗

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句子比较简单,以主语I开始的太多,可以换个说法.

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具体怎么做

举报 老实吃亏

比如 I feel it very beautiful 可以直接就 it‘s so professional that everyone can feel it.

一辈子的守望 幼苗

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如果是20分的作文可以得17分及以上,因为句子使用的短语比较高级,没有语法错误。不足之处就是有些地方有些啰嗦,有些句子太简单,可以换高级一点的表达。望采纳 对了 第二段第一句后面应该用逗号。有些句子可以换成被动语态,如:your exceptionally well-written essay
has been read by my teacher,which leave a d...

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