求大神看看下面的英语写作有没有错误啊?求修改,我知道自己写的不好,但是请大神勿喷.

求大神看看下面的英语写作有没有错误啊?求修改,我知道自己写的不好,但是请大神勿喷.
How can we be happier?
No one can be happy all the time.It's noemal to feel sad.But if we are unhappy for a long time,it will be bad for our healthy.So how can we be happier?
First,say thanks to others.Say thanks to your mother and father,your teachers and friends.They were all help you before.
Second,help others.You can try your best to help others.When you see their smiling faces,you will be happier.
Last,have a strong body.It's very important for us.It is ont only make us happier but also make the people around us happier,too.We should do sports often,for example,swimming,go hiking,play football and so on.
We should stay in a good mood,it makes us healthier.And it makes our parents happier,too.
正文第四段第二句话 “It is ont......"改为”It is not“

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How can we be happier?
No one can be happy all the time.It's noemal to feel sad.But if we are unhappy for a long time,it will be bad for our healthy（health).So how can we be happier?
First,say thanks to others.Say thanks to your mother and father,your teachers and friends.They were(have) all help (helped) you before.
Second,help others.You can try your best to help others.When you see their smiling faces,you will be happier.
Last,have a strong body.It's very important for(to) us.It is ont only make us happier but also make the people around us happier,too(不要too）.We should do sports often,for example（such as）,swimming,go（going） hiking,play（playing） football and so on.
We should stay in a good mood,（断句）it makes us healthier.And it makes our parents happier,too.Sorry啊,上面的第二句“noemal”打错了,应该是“normal",意思是”正常的”.
这样该后语法没问题,但是有些东西写得不是很圆滑,你是初二还是初三的
亲,有什么不懂欢迎追问哦~

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筱乐举报

初二。有什么意见？谢谢！

举报孤独的bird

这个文章中有很多地方都很生硬，处理得不够圆滑，有时用词也不够准确。但是初二应该都差不多，自己多看看书吧，看看英文文章。

筱乐举报

这篇作文如果考试会不会丢分呢

举报孤独的bird

这个肯定是会的，你最好问一下老师你们当地的评分标准。