英语作文修改Thereare four seasons in a year:spring,summer,autumn a

英语作文修改
Thereare four seasons in a year:spring,summer,autumn and winter.Each season hasthree months.There are three months in spring:March,April and May.I likespring best,because there are so many beautiful things.In spring,the weatherstarts to warm up,days and nights are neither too long nor too short.I hatethe cold wind of winter,I don’t like the hot son of summer,I dislike mud anddirt caused by the rains.In spring,the sun shins brightly,our world iscovered with green trees and colorful flowers,thereare many butterflies and bees over the flowers,the butterflies are dancing andthe bees are singing.Especially when you are in the countryside,youcan see green mountains,vast fields and clean streams,this scenery is sobeautiful,and the mood even more beautiful,we will also get lots ofrefreshments while having a walk in a country road.The beauty of springmakes us forget our sorrows.Its beauty pleases our eyes.So spring is a lovelyseason.Spring is the first season of a year; we can make lots of plans duringthese days,as the old Chinese saying goes:“the whole year’s work depends on agood start in spring.” So spring is a hopeful season.I like it.
求助英语大神来帮我修改下这篇文章,逻辑性,语法,词汇上的问题,在下在此谢过!
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白昼明媚 春芽

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There are four seasons in a year:spring,summer,autumn and winter.一年有四季,春夏秋冬
Each season hasthree months.改为Each season lasts three months.每季有3个月或改为there be结构
There are three months in spring:March,April and May 一直用一种结构不好
改为 March,April and May belong to spring 三四五月属于春天
I like spring best,because there are so many beautiful things.我最爱春天,因为物美于春
like...best如果是初中的话可以接受,高中不建议.
things 从词汇上来说不要用,英语里事物别用 thing ,极其chinglish.
我给你种参考句型
Everything in spring look like more vivid and That's why I like spring best.
春天万物生机勃勃,是我最爱春天的理由.
In spring,the weather starts to warm up,days and nights are neither too long nor too short.春日,温度回暖,昼日均衡.
你这句我怀疑是翻译机翻的.老师根本不可能这么教你,怎么翻法你自己翻了我才能帮你.
建议重写
I hate the cold wind of winter,I don’t like the hot son of summer,I dislike mud and dirt caused by the rains.
我讨厌冬日寒风与夏日炎炎,同样不爱雨后溅起的污泥
结构极差.
建议改成 I do not like cold wind in winter or hot sun in summer,especially the dirty mud splashed by rains.
In spring,the sun shins brightly,our world is covered with green trees and colorful flowers,
春日,阳光明媚,我们的世界充满绿树与红花.
语法问题,两句话不能用逗号隔开,要直接句号.
shine 要变shines(无需去e)
be covered with 被...覆盖 这里用的极其不好
不如用 be full of 充满 或者用别的
there are many butterflies and bees over the flowers,the butterflies are dancing and the bees are singing.花丛中的许多蝴蝶和蜜蜂,它们在飞舞和歌唱
语法上,老问题,两个句子一定要句号隔开,逗号是绝对错误的!
在花丛中,用among 或者 in 看情况而定,但用over 是绝对不可以的.
LZ你的文章每句话都有问题,我改不动了,太累了.
才10分,

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感谢您的帮助,能帮完整的修改下吗,分是可以加的,谢谢!

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去 句酷批改网 修改英语作文
自己改的更放心

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wx_tx 幼苗

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上的程序啊呜

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雯了了 幼苗

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基本上还可以,但是写四季不全面,空格上要多注意,很多单词都是连在一起的。

如果是25分的作文,给你18到20分左右吧。

I don’t like the hot sun of summer, I dislike mud and dirty caused by the rain(没有复数).

In spring, the sun shines brightly

this scenery is so beautiful, and the mood even more beautiful这句话欠妥,有点汉语化了,后半句属于并列句,但是缺动词,改成so ...that结构的句子比较好,意思为风景如此美丽以至于令人心旷神怡。The scenery is so beautiful that it is fascinating.

给你一篇参考例文,你看一下。

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