这篇英语作文写得怎么样?这篇作文是哪个层次的水平?有什么缺点?就摘录了几段IntroductionI live in a

这篇英语作文写得怎么样?
这篇作文是哪个层次的水平?有什么缺点?就摘录了几段
Introduction
I live in a very old country which has 5000 years history-China.
I’m 13 and I’m a student in No.12 Middle School of Shanxi,Taiyuan.I’m in Grade 1,Class 10,and I love my class.
I have many pen pals in different countries.Ben is from U.S.He’s a very handsome boy.Lily is from Japan,she’s very good-looking but a little bit shy.My best friend,Jerry.A very tall boy from Tianjin,he’s 15 years old,I often play computer games with him,we’re all happy.
Every morning,I like to take a work in the park,but now I can’t,because I have to go to school early.