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我写的作文 请求高手修改 帮我进步 尽量不要偏离我的本意 不足之处 求改正
My lovely hometown
If I say I come from Dengfeng,you may even not hear about it,but if I say I come from ShaoLin Tample,I am sure you know it very well.
Dengfeng,my hometown,is famous for ShaoLin Tample.Every year,more than thousands of people come to Dengfeng to visit ShaoLin Tample.I think it is the Chinese Kofu which give people an image that only hero can own it that attract people all over the world to come here.However,I am a girl who have no interest in it and I do not want to describe it in detail.
I would like to represent the scenic attraction in Dengfeng.Dengfeng is a city have many mountains in it.Among them the most distinguished one is Mountain Song,one of the five famous mountains in China,give people here a lot of fun.Spring had come early this year,with warm quick rains and sudden frothing of pink peach blossoms and dogwood dappling with white stars and Mountain Song.It is the best time for people here to do some mountain-climbing.Mountain-climbing is the favourite sport here in Dengfeng.Carried some food and water,in a sunny day,set out,to enjoy our life!
Songyang Faculty,academy of classical learning in old day,is another place of interest in Dengfeng.There are three admiral cypresses in it.One thousand years ago,the king of Han dynasty came here to visit Songyang Faculty.When she saw the first big cypress,she said in surprise:"What a big cypress!"So she called it "No.1 cypress."Then she walked along the road,when she saw the second large cypress,she amazed:"This one is bigger than the first one!"But she can not change her word ,so she called it"No.2 cypress".But when she saw the third huge cypress,she astounded:"This one is the biggest one!"Can you image that The biggest cypress was called"No.3 cypress",The biggest one was so angry that it is a paunch was broken.
This is my hometown,lovely and centuried.Welcome to Dengfeng!
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