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My first family holiday
Five years ago,I had my first holiday with my parents to Xi ‘an,That travel made a deep impression on me.
We took a train there,As we know,trains are always crowded with people.This was true of the moment when we went to Xi ‘an.Without seats,we just had little room to stand.It was so terrible a thing that many people felt uncomfortable.Even though,I was smiling all the time.My parents looked at me and also smiled.
After we arrived in Xi ‘an,I got more excited .I once heard there were plenty of places of interest with a long and a colorful history.Today I could see all of these with my own eyes.We visited Terra Cotta Warriors (兵马俑）It was amazing and the tour guide told many stories about it.We also climbed Mount Hua华山）which is famous for its precipitous(险峻）.Climbing it was so hard that I couldn't go on .But my parents never gave up encouraging me to continue climbing.Finally I made it.Though I was tired ,I got a lot of pleasure.
From that holiday ,my family all love each other more and more.

Five years ago,I had my first holiday with my parents to Xian,which left a deep impression on me.
We rode a train there. As is know to all, trains are always crowded with people.It was true...

It was a terrible thing .
There were plenty of interests .
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My first family holiday
Five years ago, I had my first holiday with my parents to （Xi’an）, That travel left a deep impression on me.
We rode a train there,As （we...