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My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the best important 【最重要-most important 】thing【事件-event】 for Chinese.
On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit【过去式-visited】 my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small village and the sight 【风景-scenery,sight表示视野,加一个there】is different from the city.During the stay in my grandparents' house,I did lots of things.But there is something makes me very happy .【转折关系不对...用and更好~】Let me show you about them!
In the evening of New Year's Day,my grandpa lit up a fire!The fire was very light【明亮的 用bright 更好】,very strong and very warm!We all stood beside the fire and we felt very happy.
After that,we were all tired and hungry.So we go back to the room.To our surprise,there were many plates of dumplings on the table.They were made by my grandma.They are delicious and we eat【过去式-ate】 them happily!
What a nice day!Although the day is pass【已经结束要用现在完成时has passed】,it will always be missed by me!【这句话没必要用被动,改 I will always remember it】

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　　My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the 【most】 important thing for Chinese.
【去掉on】This New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit my grandparents. My grandparents live in ...

visited，there are something，so we went back， they were delicious ，we ate them

My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the most important thing for Chinese.
On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visited my grandparents. My grandparents live in a ...

best改为most visit改为visited makes改为made show改为tell
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1. best 改成most

2. new year's day指元旦. 春节用chinese new year's day

3. 你想说的是你回老家过年了. 如果你不是出生在老家,那么就不是hometown.可以说I went to visit my grandparents who lived in another...