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Gulliver's Travels
Gulliver's Travels is a fantasy novel,the writer is Jonathan Swift,he is a British and born in Ireland.Book is about a man named Gulliver,he traveled four countries ,for example Lilliput,Brobdingnag,Laputa,Houyhnhnms.he experience many difficulties but he didn’t give up the hope of live.he still continued his principle ,and solve lots of troubles by himself.
As far as i can see,he is a hero.when faced with difficulties he never show his afraid,he always look happy,and in the end he come back hometown.
Different countries have their own feature,but the Brobdingnag was impressed upon me.The people in there are very tall and strong,the king of this country is very pride ,he think his country is the best country in the world,Gulliver’s words are very laughable.Gulliver became a actor and played acrobatics for king.what a bad experience it was!
I think Gulliver’s life is zigzag,but he doesn't give in to his fate.i am proud of him.And i think if i were Gulliver,maybe i can’t do such better like him.i am interested in this foreign novel.Sometimes i hope i can become the heroine in this book and experience lots of funny things.
This novel is wroth to reading,i advice people can read it in your free time .
Gulliver's Travels
Gulliver's Travels is a fantasy novel,the writer is Jonathan Swift,he is a British and born in Ireland.Book is about a man named Gulliver,he traveled four countries ,for example Lilliput,Brobdingnag,Laputa,Houyhnhnms.he experience many difficulties but he didn’t give up the hope of live.he still continued his principle ,and solve lots of troubles by himself.
As far as i can see,he is a hero.when faced with difficulties he never show his afraid,he always look happy,and in the end he come back hometown.
Different countries have their own feature,but the Brobdingnag was impressed upon me.The people in there are very tall and strong,the king of this country is very pride ,he think his country is the best country in the world,Gulliver’s words are very laughable.Gulliver became a actor and played acrobatics for king.what a bad experience it was!
I think Gulliver’s life is zigzag,but he doesn't give in to his fate.i am proud of him.And i think if i were Gulliver,maybe i can’t do such better like him.i am interested in this foreign novel.Sometimes i hope i can become the heroine in this book and experience lots of funny things.
This novel is wroth to reading,i advice people can read it in your free time .
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Gulliver's Travels
Gulliver's Travels is a fantasy （此处应该为fantasty）novel,(which is written by) Jonathan Swift,a British who was born in Ireland.The book is about a man named Gulliver.Gulliver has traveled to four countries,Lilliput,Brobdingnag,Laputa and Houyhnhnms.He experienced many difficulties but he didn’t give up the hope of live.he still continued his principle ,and stay out of trouble by himself.
As far as i can see,he is a hero.for facing with difficulties he has never shown his fear but always lookS happy,and in the end he came back to his hometown.
Different countries have their own feature,but the Brobdingnag was impressed upon me.The people there are very tall and strong.Besides,the king of this country was very pride.So he thought his country was the best in the world.His words made people laugh.Gulliver became an(用an而不用a) actor and played acrobatics for king.What a bad experience it was!
I think Gulliver’s life is like a zigzag,but he's never given in to his fate.I am proud of him.And i think if i were Gulliver,maybe i can’t do such good like him.i am interested in this foreign novel.Sometimes i hope i can become the heroine in this book and experience lots of funny things.
This novel is wroth to reading,i recommend that you can read it in your free time .
注意：已给予一定的修改,文章大体保留,部分修改没有标出的地方希望自己留意.
点评：文章语言简洁生动,但是段落间某些语句安排有点不够恰当,另外要注意写文章的结构.希望你能给予文章题目再做进一步修改.继续加油!
Gulliver's Travels is a fantasy （此处应该为fantasty）novel,(which is written by) Jonathan Swift,a British who was born in Ireland.The book is about a man named Gulliver.Gulliver has traveled to four countries,Lilliput,Brobdingnag,Laputa and Houyhnhnms.He experienced many difficulties but he didn’t give up the hope of live.he still continued his principle ,and stay out of trouble by himself.
As far as i can see,he is a hero.for facing with difficulties he has never shown his fear but always lookS happy,and in the end he came back to his hometown.
Different countries have their own feature,but the Brobdingnag was impressed upon me.The people there are very tall and strong.Besides,the king of this country was very pride.So he thought his country was the best in the world.His words made people laugh.Gulliver became an(用an而不用a) actor and played acrobatics for king.What a bad experience it was!
I think Gulliver’s life is like a zigzag,but he's never given in to his fate.I am proud of him.And i think if i were Gulliver,maybe i can’t do such good like him.i am interested in this foreign novel.Sometimes i hope i can become the heroine in this book and experience lots of funny things.
This novel is wroth to reading,i recommend that you can read it in your free time .
注意：已给予一定的修改,文章大体保留,部分修改没有标出的地方希望自己留意.
点评：文章语言简洁生动,但是段落间某些语句安排有点不够恰当,另外要注意写文章的结构.希望你能给予文章题目再做进一步修改.继续加油!
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