英语问题这是我第一遍写得 free admission museum Recently.Museum can provi

英语问题
这是我第一遍写得 free admission museum
Recently.Museum can provide a chance to enter with free admission.The reason why museum take the action is that the activity can attact many people to learn about the knowledge of museum,to care about history and science.
In the other hand.It result in many problem will be happened with increasingly people.There is a secure problem while many people thrust into museum.The more people come in,The more heavy stress traffic has.The envirnomental problem must be brust into.
In my opinion,It can't emphsize the benefit of the activity too much.We should make the important point in how to deal with those probelm.Many things have couple sides from what we need to learn to how to coordinate with problem. 大家说不好,我就改了改,看看格式,中心句问题.这是我自己改后得free admission museum
Recently.There is a hearted discussion about free admission museum.The reason why museum take the action is that the activity can attact many people to learn about the knowledge of museum,to care about history and science.
In the other hand.The negative of effects of the activity would happen in following aspects.For one thing. The more people come in,The more heavy stress traffic has. For another.There is a secure problem while many people thrust into museum.In addition.with increasing number of people come in. The envirnomental problem must be brust out.
In my opinion,The benefit of the activity shouldn’t be emphasized too much.So.How to deal with and coordinate those problem are the most important and essential things need we do
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