please help me corrot and enrich it

please help me corrot and enrich it
Last year,I once liked a girl.but it was a pity that she was dead because of cardiopathy.She is a good And beautiful girl.Frequently a sudden attack of heart trouble but she is brave ,she always endured sorrows which cause in heart.She love his life,she have a brother And I.she hope she can lived to be 20.But the god is veay bloodiness And robbed him of his life in his eighteen.
She is very godness.In her life,she happened to funny things.One day,she walked to the supermarket And saw some children who are palying in the her house of downstairs.But there were some men who was famous for delinquent children spying on them not far away.She is afraid that men were disadvantage of chileren.So she sat to protect some children in the front of steps in the all afternoon.Some delinquent seems to look some children in the all afternoon.She is surprised to their patient.Afterward she knew some men always saw him nor children