麻烦各位英语高手帮忙修改篇英语作文、谢谢、
麻烦各位英语高手帮忙修改篇英语作文、谢谢、
作文题目是：What's your problems in your life?How do you deal with it?
我是这样写的,麻烦大家帮忙看看有没有哪里有错、有的话帮忙提出来、谢谢、
Everyone has many problems in life.I have problems too.First of all,sometimes I have disagreements with my parents.I usually solve the problems by talking with my parents.It helped a lot.Then,I think I am a little lazy in my life.Because I don't want to do exercise.Later on I realized that it's bad for my health.so I star to run everyday.Finally,I always make mistakes in life.So I regard these prombles as challenges.
I believe I can solve the problems well.
麻烦各位了、
作文题目是：What's your problems in your life?How do you deal with it?
我是这样写的,麻烦大家帮忙看看有没有哪里有错、有的话帮忙提出来、谢谢、
Everyone has many problems in life.I have problems too.First of all,sometimes I have disagreements with my parents.I usually solve the problems by talking with my parents.It helped a lot.Then,I think I am a little lazy in my life.Because I don't want to do exercise.Later on I realized that it's bad for my health.so I star to run everyday.Finally,I always make mistakes in life.So I regard these prombles as challenges.
I believe I can solve the problems well.
麻烦各位了、
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1.你的语法还是不错的.就是要注意时态的前后一致.你在阐述生活中的事情.既然用了一般现在时,后面就都用这个时代,不要出现过去式.
2.你用了first of all 和finally 但是我没见到secondly.所以要么去除,换别的词,要么中间插一个.而且这3个词一般用在作文的每个大段之前.
2.另外就是要注意用词,这个以后可以锻炼的,没问题.帮你小改改.
Everyone has many problems in life.I have problems too.First of all,sometimes I have disagreements with my parents.I usually solve problems by talking with my parents.It helps a lot.Secondly,I think I am a little lazy in my life.Because I don't want to do exercise.Later on,I realize that it's bad for my health.so I start to jogging everyday.Finally,I always make mistakes in life.But I regard these prombles as challenges.
I believe I can solve the problems well.
2.你用了first of all 和finally 但是我没见到secondly.所以要么去除,换别的词,要么中间插一个.而且这3个词一般用在作文的每个大段之前.
2.另外就是要注意用词,这个以后可以锻炼的,没问题.帮你小改改.
Everyone has many problems in life.I have problems too.First of all,sometimes I have disagreements with my parents.I usually solve problems by talking with my parents.It helps a lot.Secondly,I think I am a little lazy in my life.Because I don't want to do exercise.Later on,I realize that it's bad for my health.so I start to jogging everyday.Finally,I always make mistakes in life.But I regard these prombles as challenges.
I believe I can solve the problems well.
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