这几句话语法有没有错?Egg Drop Soup--- Simple soup of chicken broth,bea

Egg Drop Soup--- Simple soup of chicken broth,beaten egg,green onion and seasonings.Sometimes dress it up with tamatoes,mushrooms and other vegetables.
改：Simple chicken soup,mixed with egg,(okay 我知道你想说“打鸡蛋”但是不能这么说 也是cracked egg 更何况这里不能这么说 要不然你这汤里不成了有鸡蛋皮儿了``) green onion and seasonings.Sometimes dressed it with tamatoes,mushrooms and other vegetable.
Fried Rice--- Ingredients used in fried rice include vegetables,such as carrot,pea,cucumber and green onion.They also include ham,chicken and eggs.(改：It also includes.要不成了carrot,pea,cucumber and green onion 包含了ham,chicken and eggs.ham 长在carrot里?) It's tasty and have rich vitamins.And it can easy make at home.(改：And it can be easily made at home.) This dish is famous in the world and it's my favourite.(改：This dish is famous around the world and it's m favourite.)
famous around the world?not so sure about that```

Simple soup of chicken broth, made of beaten egg, green onion and seasonings. Sometimes it is dressed up with tamatoes, mushrooms and other vegetables.
Fried Rice--- the ingredients used are infr...