一篇13年英语考研的大作文,求批改

　　As is shown in the picture above, we can see clearly that a crowd of graduates are confronted with considerable life choices, such as whether landing a job or creating a job, and whether striving for further study or going abroad.
　　What has been revealed in the picture is that every graduate is individually obliged to make a life choice after having finished their college study. It is obvious to us that there are various choices are waiting for us, such as finding a job or going abroad for further study.
　　As is known to us that, however, all roads lead to Rome. There is no doubt that it is crucial forus graduates to make our own life decisions, which depend on our personal working experiences, skills, interests and life goals. So long as we are industrious and excellent, I firmly believe that ,whatever we choose to engage in, we will have achievements in the future. As far as I'm concerned, I have set my mind on striving for further study in that social competition is increasingly competitive. It is superior for me to enlarge my knowledge that can guarantee my capability for a decent job.
　　Based on the above reasons, everyone is supposed to struggle to fulfill their life goals byexerting efforts. So long as we try, we will succeed.