nowadays,it is hard to imagine how often you are a victim of

nowadays,it is hard to imagine how often you are a victim of traffic jam.as is shown in the picture
How busy the traffic is.The busy traffic makes our road become smaller.therefore,it is easy to know that the busy traffic is a serious problem.
there are many facters contributing to this problem.with the development of our country,more and more people like buy cars.every one likes to drive their own cars to some place where they want to go.
as far as i am concerned`.
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