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In this century,there are more and more students like to do a part-time job at their spare time.For example,they will be a watier or waiteress in a restaurant,they may help some parents who have no time with their kids to look afteri their children and so on…… Nobody would disagree that family education is one of the most popular part-time job among all of the choices.
In my personal opinion,I think family education has its advantages and disadvantages.In the positive side,the most important thing is how you would like to define this question.If you are able to handle it well enough,it will have achieved good effect；unfortunately,if you handle it in an inappropriate way,there will be adverse effects which will lead to more and more negative results as chain effect.
First of all,we can go over the advantages of family education.There are a great deal of advantages for sure,but I would like to try to summarize all of them into few points as below to make it easier for you to capture the core parts.
First,students who did the part time job can receive some reward from doing family education,and their family economic pressure can be improved in a positive way.For example,by doing the family education,the student who can make more money which he can contribute to his family who may need it seriously.By doing that,his whole family living standard can be improved in different ways such as buying more healthy and good food,having more medical treat treatment,and installing more furniture or home usage products.
Secondly,family education can train up your behavior and communication skill in different perspective.University graduate employment situation is not very good to meet the society standard,there is lack of experience,communication and manner.Those skill sets can be improved through the family education.For example,by doing the family education,the student will have more opportunity to communicate with different people,and learned to use different attitude to treat different people.
There are two problems of the main defective:safety and time
First of all,we occasionally heard that some students be persecuted when they are doing their family education.Those things could show us the danger of the family education..But these kind of situation happen at this stage.
Secondly,although the students have enough time,but by doing the family education may affect their learning environment and attitud because they are still young,and by doing the part time job will shift their focus of their primary objective.If you are not able to handle this well enough,it is not good for you and it will also lead you into a situation that can not resume back to the normal situation.
As a result,if you want to do the family education,you should analyze your own situation carefully,and then you can make your favorable choice in a smart way.