请大家帮帮我评下我的英语作文.I know you love the Chinese lecture ,exceptio

请大家帮帮我评下我的英语作文.
I know you love the Chinese lecture ,exceptionally the Chinese traditional opera.Now I am writing to tell you that the Chinese Shaoxing Opera “Butterfly Lovers” will be play on August 5th,at two pm,in the Tianjing Grand Theater.So I want to invite you to watch this opera with me.On the one hand,it can help you know the Chinese culture is colorful and rich,on the other hand,we haven't met very long,I hope through this opera to deepen our friendship.
After the opera,I will take you to go to the mesuem and gallery nearby the theater.In the evening,we will go to the restaurant for dinner together,and we can chat any topic you want to chat,by the way,the Chinese food is delicious,I think you will enjoy it well.
I am looking forward to you coming here soon,so please reply me.
Best Wish
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zz的鸵鸟001 幼苗

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I know you love the Chinese culture(lecture讲座,看下文主要讲的是文化方面的,我觉得用culture比较好),especially(尤其是) the Chinese traditional opera.
Now I am writing to tell you that the Chinese Shaoxing Opera “Butterfly Lovers” will be play in the Tianjing Grand Theater on August 5th,at two PM(地点状语一般在前,时间在后),So I want to invite you to watch this opera with me.
On the one hand,it can help you know of the colorful and rich Chinese culture.
On the other hand,we didn't meet very long,so I hope through this opera to deepen our friendship.(这里有点不是很好,你朋友看了后感觉会不舒服.on the other hand,I missed you so much and I can't help wanting to meet you.)
After seeing the opera,I will take you to ( go to去掉 ) the nearby mesuem and gallery.(nearby the theater.去掉)
In the evening,we will go to the restaurant for dinner together,and we can chat any topics you want to chat about.By the way,the Chinese food is delicious,I think you will enjoy it well.
I am looking forward to your coming here soon,so please reply me.
Best Wish
整体来说不错.

1年前

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123123风 幼苗

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  1. we haven't met very long语法可能错误;

  2. 第一段最好要首行缩进,除非段中改写;

  3. ,and we can chat any topic you want to chat有and就不需要“,"了吧?

  4. I am looking forward...

1年前

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