People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do
People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do take up part-time job.
People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do take up part-time job that they may not have enough time to study.
持不同见解的人可能会说:如果学生做兼职,他们可能没有足够的时间来学习或休息.
英文文法意思上是否有误?