【写作内容】:以约120个词就我心中的英雄的话题谈谈你的看法,内容包括:(1)上文使你想起哪位英雄

【写作内容】:以约120个词就我心中的英雄的话题谈谈你的看法,内容包括:(1)上文使你想起哪位英雄
(2)谈谈你心中的英雄;(3)你心中的英雄对你有什么影响?
The writer think hero is an ordinary person like his music teacher who loves teacher who loves teaching children.He is patient ,friendly and always smiling to student ,so students like him so much.
What the writer said makes me remind the hero in my mind.my mum is my hero who always gives me encouragement and help which make me stronger.
My mother is quite good-looking.She is beautiful.She is tall and slim,with yellow skin and straight hair .She is always helping people.For example ,when someone who doesn't know how to go to a piace,my mum will teach them which way to go and which bus they need to take.
My mum is bravely ang clever and she influence me a lot.When I face problem I will think of my mum and think if I were she what I should do ,then I try to solve the problem on my own.finally ,I love my mum so much
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_Cynthia_ 1年前 已收到1个回答 举报

tyhhu 幼苗

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第一行 think应该改为thinks 去掉后面的“who loves teacher”
第二行 smiling at students
第三行 makes改成made “my mum”改成“My mom”,M大写 妈妈是mom
第四行不改
第五行不改
第六行最后一个单词拼错了,应该是place
第七行还是mom的拼写问题,另外teach改成tell
第八行mom,brave不用副词,就brave就行.influence加s,变成influences
第九行 think改成imagine,she改成her,should改成would.finally首字母大写,Finally.
行文还算顺畅,就是错误有点多 给7.5分吧.满分十分.

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