请帮我改一下这篇英语作文是练习写的考研作文,题目是一张图画,图画的上半部分是刚发名汽车的时候,人们认为有了汽车什么地方都

请帮我改一下这篇英语作文
是练习写的考研作文,题目是一张图画,图画的上半部分是刚发名汽车的时候,人们认为有了汽车什么地方都能去.图画的下半部分是是现在堵车的画面.
希望能重点帮我找找语法方面的问题.比如"cars played a role which .",“more and more people like a comfortable way of living ”这几句有点拿不准,还有在公共汽车上应该用“in”还是“on”我也记不清了.这样的问题希望能多留意一些.
另外最后一段的大部分我是背的范文,应该没什么问题.
As is depicted in the picture ,in the old times ,cars played a role which could make it easy people to go to everywhere ,on the contrary ,nowadays ,large numbers of the automobile have brought some serious problems to us ,bbecause more and more people are willing to have their own cars.
It is abundantly clear that the artist is purposfully reminding us of a rather negative phenomenon emerging in today's society .In fact ,traffic jams are not uncommon nowadays .The issue is attributed to three factors.In the first place ,with the development of the economy ,many people are very busy ,they are usually on a business trip ,driving acar makes it convenient .In the second place ,more and more people like a comfortable way of living .Sitting in a car is obviously more comfortable than standing in a bus .In the third place ,some people believe that having a car is the symbol of wealth and success.
From my perspective ,we should take some effective mersures to solve the problem of trafic jams .The first step shoud be to fundamentally change lifestyles so that the car is no longer part and parcel of everydaylife .governments also need to apply attractive measures to draw citizens to adopt means of public transportation.