英语四级作文帮忙改错（在麻烦写出正确的语句和错误原因）~可以的话在评个分,就按四级的标准~

ON BLIND -DATE SHOW
During recent years ,the topic of date show ,which has aroused the public attention ,（此处最好加上逗号前面which引导的句子为非限制性定语从句） is becoming more and more popular.Undoubtedly（大写） ,date ,which is an(粗心） indispensable part for the development of the love,has a profound impact on both individuals and society.
Date,rather than anything else,plays an important role in the growth of the love
.when you arrived the age that you should get married,your parents must let you
have a date（此处have a date改为go dating较好） or attend a date show,in order to have a lover.Moreover ,you have to execute the order.
It is crucial for us to have a clean and definite knowledge of the date show.There
are old saying "it's yours ,it always yours ".（前一句话可改为According to an old saying,"it's yours ,it always yours ".） From(lz打错了吧,囧） my point of view ,I think that ,the love is development for the time ,not the blind-show.（最后一句个人认为意思上有点问题,我给你修改补充了一下—— From my point of view,beautiful love is like beauteous lyrics,which can never expect to meet,but often comes to you in every unexpected moment.Maybe,the love will come along with one casual day not in the way of date shows.So as time goes by,you will find that it's the contingency that the charm of love resides in.Also ,you will find that blind date shows will just lead to the slaying of the beauty of love.)
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During recent years ,the topic of date show ,which has aroused the public attention is becoming more and more popular改为：
During recent years ,the topic of date show ,is becoming more and more pop...

My Viewpoint On A Date Show
A Date show ,which has aroused the public attention over the recent years, is becoming more and more popular. Whatever TV channel we turn on,we can alway...

整体来说这篇文章还是观点鲜明，连接词也永德恰到好处，错误不多，如果是考试的话，应该能拿高分的！
ON BLIND -DATE SHOW
During recent years, the topic of date show ,which has aroused the public’s attention, is becoming more and more...

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