英语大神进!急~这是我写的英语作文,学校要.哪位大神帮我看看有没有语法错误,有的话帮我改一下,谢谢啦~很急的~My Bi

英语大神进!急~
这是我写的英语作文,学校要.哪位大神帮我看看有没有语法错误,有的话帮我改一下,谢谢啦~很急的~
My Big Family
Do you like your family?Most people will say“Of course”.Your family will make you happy when you feel upset.So is my family.It’s really big but warm enough.There are eight people in my family. I’m glad to let you know them.
My grandfather is a brave political instructor before.He left many scars from the army.He has dug in many caves.When he told me these things,he always smiled.Now,one of the caves he dug in open to the tourists.He wrote an article about this cave and sent it to the company.He also have the studens all over the China.Some of them usually call him up.And some of them usually visit him.He is popular before,isn’t he?
My grandma cooks very well.Her education isn’t very good but she is a really good grandma.She quitted her job to look after me when I was very young.I thaked her a lot.
My father is a fireman before.But now,he is a officer.He becomes fatter and fatter.So,he persist in playing badminton with his colleagues twice a week.He is thinner now.But he likes to eat sweets,especially candy flass.When I remind him not to eat sweet so much.Of course,it goes in one ear and out the other.
How about my mother?She is proud to draw or paint a beautiful picture.She does well in handicraft.I have to admit her talent.But she isn’t rational when she is shopping!She buy a lot of coat and shoes.
My aunt is a kind woman.She usually shopping with my mother.She is my father’s sister.She usually give me presents.She is very fashionable.She has almost been to all the cake shops.Isn’t that crazy?
My uncle is a humorous person.He is my aunt’s husband. He is not only a elder ,but also a friend.We usually talked on phone before he became my uncle.He is good at computer.So,he usually tells me the most popular large games.
The last one is my cousin.He is my aunt’s son.He is only 5 years old now.But he is infatuated with cartoons and toy cars.He has more than one hundred toy cars in different sizes and colors.He likes to watch me playing computer games,too.I have to play games about spiderman or superman everyday.He usually fights with my father .That’s inevitable because he was born in the year of chicken.And my father was born in the year of dog.
We eat dinner together almost every night.Do you like my family?
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1,He left many scars from the army.是说为战争留下伤痕.
改成 he has got scars from the army. ,
2,Now,one of the caves he dug in open to the tourists要用被动,洞是被开放的,用完成时比较好,强调影响.
改成 one of the caves he dug has been open to the tourists
3,He also have the studens all over the China.Some of them usually call him up.And some of them usually visit him.He is popular before,isn’t he?
studens 拼写错误,检查一下看别的地方是否都写正确了.
4,he persist
改成 persists 三人称单数加S
5,Her education isn’t very good
改成 she recieved lower education.
6,She is proud to draw or paint a beautiful picture
改成 She is fond of drawing or painting a beautiful picture
7,She usually shopping with my mother
改成 She usually go shopping with my mother.
8,He is not only a elder
改成 an elder
9,he usually tells me the most popular large games
改成 tell me how to play the most .
10,I have to play games about spiderman or superman everyday.
改成 I love playing games about.,
基本上挺好的,你这样的年龄能写出这样的文章已经很不错了,加油!文章中一些拼写和基本语法,按照我改写的再检查检查,祝好运、成功!

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