Ordinay people are abundant in sympathy.So we always give a

Ordinay people 应改为:Ordinay people like us
are abundant in sympathy 改为 have abundant sympathy 或 are with abundant sympathy.
officer 是众数 officers
only can enjoy their life 应是 only would enjoy their life.
make the money fly 应是 wasting a lot of their money.或 spending a lot of their money.
What do you think?改为:Do anyone agree with that?
更正後的版本:
Ordinay people like us are with abundant sympathy.So we always give a little money to beggars on the way.Moreover,we often pay more attention to social problems.On the contrary,the rich or the officers of goverment only would enjoy their life as well as wasting a lot of their money.Do anyone agree with that?
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