初一下学期英语过去式作文 短一点的 不要有生词

Last summer holiday,My family had gone to HongKong ,At the morning ,my father drive the car to Shenzhen,After the lunch,we take the car to HongKong,HongKong is a center of fanancial.There are many people in there,We just go shopping ,then ,we had a good dinner.
The next day ,we gone to the Ocean Park,it was very intersting and wonderful.The good expression was the informce of the dophin,They could save people,also could show many things.They are very smart!
I like HongKong very much !

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Last summer holiday,I went to Beijing with my parents.We had a good time there.First,we went to the Great Wall.It was very beautiful.
Then,we went to Wangfujing Street to do so...

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1楼 had gone 用的不好，换went。然后是in the morning ...
drive 改 drove . After 后面的 the 不能加。take 改took 。。。
in there 最好去掉。go 改went
第2段:有 gone吗？——|+ 改went.第2句貌似有点中文英语的感觉。
1楼啊！错误百出啊。！